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Morning sunlight pierces the curtains
The alarm rings in my ear
Two hours too early
The snooze button’s broken

I hate it

No one’s home
One plate at the table
A half-empty glass of orange juice
A bowl of cold cereal

I hate it

Went to school early
Rode with the same old bike
Seat’s too hard
The wheels kept squeaking

I hate it

First period’s Math
Forgot my locker combination
Slipped on the floor
Lost my homework

I hate it

School’s almost done
Rode through the afternoon
Chain breaks loose
Walked five blocks home

I hate it

Rested in bed
Wanted to watch TV
Signal’s busted
Forgot to pay cable

I hate it

Can’t take it anymore
Screamed my head off
Why is life so unfair?
Why is this always happening to me?

I hate it
I want to die
1st Place winner for ^joannastar and `GaioumonBatou's Random Emo Title Generator Poetry Contest

It's poorly done, I know, I just jumbled words up, I only do conceptual stuff, so here y'go

This poem's proof why emo's are overpopulating the world, they hate everything! The littlest things can turn you emo!
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soaki Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2009
PWAHAHAHAHAHA! Oh yes, this is pretty much emo to the extreme. Noticing every little thing that goes wrong, hating it, and wishing it to die. :XD: Thanks, this really made me laugh.
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thebangzats Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2009  Student Filmographer
Thanks for that ^^
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lilmandrewl Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2009  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Very well put, and I don't know if it was intentional, but your putting all of your verbs in past tense, then using present tense in the middle to say, "I hate it." Like i said, i don't know if it was intentional, but stuck out
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thebangzats Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2009  Student Filmographer
Don't know if it was intentional or not, don't even know it was wrong. I'll see if fixing it makes it sounds better (I don't really know English, I just go with what sounds right)

Thanks for the input ^^
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lilmandrewl Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2009  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
i just noticed it since thats the one thing my creative writing teacher catches me on.
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thebangzats Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2009  Student Filmographer
Ahaha, well to be honest, I've learned all I know just from watching cable TV, so I don't see if my English grammar, pronunciation, etc, is wrong, I just write what feels right. Going on language instincts is easy, but it's hard to get a perfect 100 in my grades
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lilmandrewl Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2009  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
well great poem either way, and congratulations on your winning in the RET contest
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:iconthebangzats:
thebangzats Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2009  Student Filmographer
Thank you
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Envenomed-Ascent Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2009
That is really well done! Laughed the whole way through, specifically the "half-empty glass of orange juice". Nice touch there, and congrats on winning!
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:iconthebangzats:
thebangzats Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2009  Student Filmographer
Looked through some everyday things that can spark anger is all, and let's face it, someday in our lives, there has to be moments like that, I know I certainly have
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Envenomed-Ascent Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2009
Oh yeah. Just forgot the rain on the walk home. ;] Otherwise nothin' got left out.
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ShadowBunnies Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2009
Honestly, it made me grin and that's more than other poems ever do.
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:iconthebangzats:
thebangzats Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2009  Student Filmographer
Thanks, didn't expect it to be that good, maybe it's just cause I did it for the lulz
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platinummyr Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2009  Hobbyist Writer
Oh yes. this is totally worth a first place!! :XD:
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:iconthebangzats:
thebangzats Featured By Owner Feb 1, 2009  Student Filmographer
Thanks for that ^^
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arlihama Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
Congratulations on winning! ^^
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:iconthebangzats:
thebangzats Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2009  Student Filmographer
Thank you ^^
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arlihama Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2009  Hobbyist General Artist
Welchy! ^^
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GaioumonBatou Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2009
Congrats on the win. :lmao: I died laughing the first time I read it. XDD
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thebangzats Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2009  Student Filmographer
O.O
Win? Didn't see a notice anywhere

Thanks
Glad I could make you die laughing...
...wait, what?
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GaioumonBatou Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2009
Ah, ^joannastar posted the results a few minutes ago. [link]

:lmao:
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:iconthebangzats:
thebangzats Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2009  Student Filmographer
Ah, yes...
...
...
...*cough*
...
...I won?!

:w00t:
Thanks!
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GaioumonBatou Featured By Owner Jan 29, 2009
:lol: No worries.
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orihalchon Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2009  Student Filmographer
AAAAHAHAHAHAHA!!!! dimana-mana tidak ada yg namanya KEBAIKAN! nasib buruk slalu menanti.... EAT IT! EAT IT! EAT IT!
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fubumania1412 Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2009
nice~!! :D :D :D
for something that's poorly done, it's REALLY nice...
:D :D :D
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:iconthebangzats:
thebangzats Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2009  Student Filmographer
^^
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fubumania1412 Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2009
:D :D :D
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:iconneedlesjuubei:
needlesjuubei Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2009
It's kinda sad...:cries:
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:iconthebangzats:
thebangzats Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2009  Student Filmographer
...well yeah, in a way
but we all have our bad days, being all suicide about it is just weird to me
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:iconneedlesjuubei:
needlesjuubei Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2009
yeah, but some just can't take it anymore. you know?
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:iconthebangzats:
thebangzats Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2009  Student Filmographer
Yeah, I know
...well, it's a good thing I've found the answer to life then, "Life sucks, deal with it."
Best. Advice. Ever.
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needlesjuubei Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2009
yeah. My dad says: "Life Sucks then you die!" I don't believe that all life sucks though.
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thebangzats Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2009  Student Filmographer
Not to be pessimistic but, it will eventually. No one's happy all the time, at some point it will suck, I can be something small or huge, but at some point, it will suck to some degree
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Singingtomyownsong Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2009
Don't want to intrude but the opposite is true too. I mean, a life isn't composed of just bad things. Life, in the big picture, is a balance between opposites. So even if something bad happpens, something good will happen too. "No one's happy all the time" but no ones is sad all the time either.
I'm sorry. I didn't mean to jump in all babble like that, i just thought i should say that. Anyways, going on to the subject of the poem, i really like it! I know I've had days like that! Still do! But it's really well written! I like :D
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thebangzats Featured By Owner Jan 16, 2009  Student Filmographer
Thanks ^^
Let's see it fare against the other entries then
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:iconneedlesjuubei:
needlesjuubei Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2009
yeah, you're right.
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:iconthebangzats:
thebangzats Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2009  Student Filmographer
what? it's supposed to be funny O_O XD
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:iconneedlesjuubei:
needlesjuubei Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2009
really? But so many bad things happened! :sniff:
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:iconthebangzats:
thebangzats Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2009  Student Filmographer
meh, as long as it's eligible for the contest... (though I won't win anyway)
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needlesjuubei Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2009
who says? I like it. u're good at poetry! :glomp:
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:iconthebangzats:
thebangzats Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2009  Student Filmographer
thanks ^^
I'm never confident about my works though, that's why I seek help here
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needlesjuubei Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2009
Yeah, that's a good idea!!!
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